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2018-05-24 · 첨삭 강사 Blair

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< What is the most memorable vacation you've ever had? > I can't remember exactly how old I was. Maybe I think it was about when I was in fourth grade in elementary school. I went to Namhae beach with my family. I was looking for shellfish, sarfish and carb in the sand in the sea with my old sister. We were find them, we tried to go out to show off. Then my sister was stepped on the can lid. I was crying but my sister wasn't cry. I cried when I didn't step on it. Kkkkkkkkk My sister said "I'm fine, so don't worry and don't cry" I cried more when I heard that. My sister's right foot was hurt, and was so gross. Then I couldn't go into the sea that day.. Because I was afraid to step on it too. After all, I couldn't play properly that day. But I could feel my sister's love. This day is the most memorable. I will never forget this day.

강사 첨삭

Hi there, Hyo Eun! ^^

Thanks for doing your home work.

I was reading through it and it made me smile ^^ kkkkk.

Anyway, have a wonderful evening! :)

Blair


I can\'t remember exactly how old I was.
Maybe I think it was about when I was in fourth grade in elementary school.

I went to Namhae beach with my family.

I was looking for shellfish, sarfish and carb in the sand in the sea with my old sister.

We were find them, we tried to go out to show off.

Then my sister was stepped on the can lid.

I was crying but my sister wasn\'t cry.
I cried when I didn\'t step on it. Kkkkkkkkk

My sister said \"I\'m fine, so don\'t worry and don\'t cry\"

I cried more when I heard that.

My sister\'s right foot was hurt, and was so gross.

Then I couldn\'t go into the sea that day..
Because I was afraid to step on it too.

After all, I couldn\'t play properly that day.

But I could feel my sister\'s love.

This day is the most memorable.

I will never forget this day.


I can\'t remember exactly how old I was. I think that\'s when I was in fourth grade in elementary. I went to Namhae beach with my family. I was looking for shellfish, starfish, and crabs in the sand with my older sister. We found some of them and we tried to let it out for show off. Then my sister stepped on a can lid, I was crying that time but my sister wasn\'t, I cried when I didn\'t step on it. Kkkkkk My sister said, \"I\'m fine so don\'t worry and cry.\" I cried more when I heard that, my sister\'s foot was hurt and gross. I couldn\'t go into the sea that day, because I was afraid to step on it too. However, I felt my sister\'s love, that day is the most memorable. I will never forget that day.

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