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2018-05-28 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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1. When 2. But 3.and then or and 4. Because, when 5. during 6. Although 7. Who After doing paragliding last saturday, I had to go back home, because there was an ancestral rite on that night. When I arrived home, it was almost 8 o'clock. And some relatives were talking each other about something and most food for the rite were prepared by my mother, daughter in law and ants. I felt sorry because I didn't help. So, I did my best to help them after the rite. It finished at midnight. And at that time I didn't feel any pain, because I was very busy to help them. But yesterday I felt muscle pains. Because It was a long time to do paraglidng. And paragliding makes me use some parts of my body strongly, especially legs, arms, because of the posture when I am flying. So, I felt pain on my legs, arms, abdominal muscle and neck after flying. Until now, I feel muscle pains. Maybe I will be better after today.^^ Have a good day!!

강사 첨삭

Hello KC,

Man often becomes what he believes himself to be. If I keep on saying to myself that I cannot do a certain thing, it is possible that I may end by really becoming incapable of doing it.

T. Jeny


   

1. When

>>correct
 2. But

>>correct
 3.and then or and

>>when
 4. Because, when

>>  that, when
 5. during

>>since
 6. Although

>>Though
 7. Who
>>correct
After doing paragliding last saturday, I had to go back home, because there was an ancestral rite on that night.

>>After doing paragliding last Saturday, I had to go back home because there was an ancestral rite that night.

When I arrived home, it was almost 8 o\'clock.

>>correct

And some relatives were talking each other about something and most food for the rite were prepared by my mother, daughter in law and ants.

>>And some relatives were talking with each other about something and most foods for the rite were prepared by my mother, her daughter-in-law and my ants.

I felt sorry because I didn\'t help. So, I did my best to help them after the rite.

>>correct

It finished at midnight. And at that time I didn\'t feel any pain, because I was very busy to help them.

>>It finished at midnight. And at that time I didn\'t feel any pain because I was very busy helping them.

But yesterday I felt muscle pains.

>>correct
 Because It was a long time to do paraglidng.

>> Because it was a long time since the last time I did paragliding.

 And paragliding makes me use some parts of my body strongly, especially legs, arms, because of the posture when I am flying.

>> And paragliding makes me use some parts of my body strongly, especially my arms and legs because of the posture when I am flying.

So, I felt pain on my legs, arms, abdominal muscle and neck after flying.

>>correct

Until now, I feel muscle pains.

>>correct

Maybe I will be better after today.^^

>>correct
 Have a good day!!

>>correct

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