homework

2018-05-31 · 첨삭 강사 Sharon

학생이 쓴 원문

What are the three most important things for you to be happy? Answer in 5 sentences or more. Health is the most important thing to be happy. Nowadays I'm having a toothache and headache. Because of them, I can't eat delicious food and don't want to do anything. Family is also important. There is nobody to forgive me in all situation. Only my family can do that. We can support each other without doubt and cost. Friends is also important. We have somthing to talk to only frineds, not family. ^^ I don't feel lonely if there are close friends nearby. Money is important. If I have no job and can't make money, I feel terrible. I can't satisfy my life. Sometimes I want to buy a good clothes, go to nice places and have tasty food. Job is important. Even though I have a lot of money , I want to work. It makes me to be myself.^^(can you understand?)

강사 첨삭

Hello Eunice!

Thank you for another great composition.

I\'ll call you tomorrow!

~~ Teacher Sharon

Health is the most important thing to be happy.

>> Correct
Nowadays I\'m having a toothache and headache.

>> Nowadays I\'m suffering from a toothache and a headache.

Because of them, I can\'t eat delicious food and don\'t want to do anything.
>> Because of them, I can\'t eat delicious food and don\'t want to do anything.
Family is also important.

>> Correct

There is nobody to forgive me in all situation.

>> There is nobody who can forgive all my faults. 

Only my family can do that.

>> Correct
We can support each other without doubt and cost.
>> Correct
Friends is also important.

>> Friends are also important.

We have somthing to talk to only frineds, not family. ^^

>> We have some things that we can talk about with friends and not family.

I don\'t feel lonely if there are close friends nearby.
>> Correct
Money is important.

>> Correct

If I have no job and can\'t make money, I feel terrible.

>> If I have no job and can\'t make money, I would feel terrible.

I can\'t satisfy my life.

>> I can\'t be satisfied with my life.

Sometimes I want to buy a good clothes, go to nice places and have tasty food.
>> Sometimes I want to buy good clothes, go to nice places and have tasty food.
Job is important.

>> Correct

Even though I have a lot of money , I want to work.

>> Correct
It makes me to be myself.

>> It helps me to be myself.

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