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2018-06-06 · 첨삭 강사 Gray

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I liked YG before. Becoz they made bigbang and AKMU. BUT after few issues I found out YG use press a lot for cover the truth so I thought that's too much. Now I like BigHit of course. hahaha. But I can't actaully say I like some specific agency. I just respect producer Bang. Becoz he made BTS not like other singers. He taught how to think, how to live in this world to BTS. So their music is not like other singers. Btw, your advice helped me a lot last night! hahaha I played "Fake Love" with my phone during play bowling. That helped me get some energy! yay! So last night was the last day of the league. And my team wasn't the last!! We didn't have to drink in the shoe. (eww) hahaha. League last team have to drink in the shoe. That was actually so stressful whole in this season when I didn't get the good average. Anyway it finished and fun season!! hahaha. Thanks, Gray! :D

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I liked YG before. Becoz they made bigbang and AKMU.

>> I used to like YG before. Because they made Bigbang and AKMU.


 BUT after few issues I found out YG use press a lot for cover the truth so I thought that\'s too much.

>> But, after a few issue. I found out that YG used to cover the truth about their company. So, I thought that\'s too much.


Now I like BigHit of course. hahaha.

>> I like Bighit now of course.


But I can\'t actaully say I like some specific agency.

>> But, I can\'t actually say that I like some specific agency.


I just respect producer Bang.

>> I just respect the producer of Bigbang.


Becoz he made BTS not like other singers.

>> Because he made BTS unlike other singers out there.


He taught how to think, how to live in this world to BTS.

>> he taught me that I have to think, how can we live is this world with BTS.


So their music is not like other singers.

>> CORRECT.


 Btw, your advice helped me a lot last night! hahaha

>> CORRECT


 I played \"Fake Love\" with my phone during play bowling. That helped me get some energy! yay!

>> I played \"fake love\" with my phone while I was playing bowling. That helped me to get some energy! yay!


 So last night was the last day of the league. And my team wasn\'t the last!!

>> CORRECT


 We didn\'t have to drink in the shoe. (eww) hahaha.

>> CORRECT


League last team have to drink in the shoe.

>> The last placed team have to drink from a shoe.


That was actually so stressful whole in this season when I didn\'t get the good average.

>> CORRECT


Anyway it finished and fun season!! hahaha.

>> But anyway, it was finished fast  but, It was fun!



Good job [이름] ^^ kkkk But drinking from a shoe? wow haha that surprised me kkkkkk


 Thanks, Gray! :D

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