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2018-06-01 · 첨삭 강사 Sharon

학생이 쓴 원문

I think it us up to my mind. There are many peoole who are not happy even they have a lot of money. And also, there are people who are happy even they don't have much money. But I think I will not happy if I'm poor. The money is very important for me, who is collecting the books that I want to read. Er, bating that...I just don't want to be poor.

강사 첨삭

Hi Seong Won!

Good luck with your volunteer work.

I hope that will make you happy.

Let\'s talk on Monday.

Have a good weekend.

~~ Teacher Sharon

I think it us up to my mind.

>> I think it depends on how you look at it.
There are many peoole who are not happy even they have a lot of money.
>> There are many people who are not happy even they have a lot of money.
And also, there are people who are happy even they don\'t have much money.
>> And also, there are people who are happy even if they don\'t have much money.
But I think I will not happy if I\'m poor.
>> But I think I will not be happy if I\'m poor.
The money is very important for me, who is collecting the books that I want to read.
>> The money is very important to a person like me who is collecting the books that I want to read.
Er, bating that...I just don\'t want to be poor.

>> I just don\'t want to be poor.

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