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2018-06-05 · 첨삭 강사 Klein

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How do you understand “depression”? Have you ever been depressed? How is depression addressed in your country? How do you think it should be addressed? ==> I think that depression is a disease of heart. A lot of stress can make someone to mental illness and depression. Fortunately, I don't have any experience to get a depression. I try to reduce the stress and maintain my mental to clear. If the depression is serious, you have to go to the hospital. Some of Koreans have that kind of disease, so they receive the medical treatment from the hospital. It is a disease that must be treated because it can give a damage to others.

강사 첨삭

Stay cheerful, James!

I am so glad your family is very supportive. Share the good vibes with your pals!

I ought to thank you for sharing them with me.

I wish you all the best!

Until our next chat!

-Klein-

How do you understand “depression”? Have you ever been depressed?
How is depression addressed in your country? How do you think it should be addressed?
 ==> 
I think that depression is a disease of heart.

>>I think depression is a disease of the heart.
 A lot of stress can make someone to mental illness and depression.
>>Much stress can make someone mentally ill and depressed. 

Fortunately, I don\'t have any experience to get a depression.
>>Fortunately, I don\'t have any experience having depression.

I try to reduce the stress and maintain my mental to clear.
>>I try to reduce the stress and maintain my mentality clear.

If the depression is serious, you have to go to the hospital.

>>If depression is serious, you have to go to hospital.
 Some of Koreans have that kind of disease, so they receive the medical treatment from the hospital.
>>Some Koreans have that kind of disease, so they receive some medical treatment.

It is a disease that must be treated because it can give a damage to others.

>>Correct

OR >> It is a disease that must be treated because it can hurt others. 

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