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Some people think that success is the best measure for intelligence, while others think that intelligence can be measured in other ways. What is your opinion?
I think that success is the measure for intelligence. Some people insist that it's not ture, because the success needs many things to accomplished not only intelligence. But, I say everything is about intellegence, for instance, "effort" can be a different type of intelligence. If somebody efforts a lot to success, then it means he is smart enough to know what he wants to do. Same as this, "lucky" can be a different type of it. If somebody's got lucky, it means he is already qulified to get it. And I think he'd been trying to do something to be deserved that. So, if someone doesn't effort anything, I will say he is not intelligent.
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Hello there Jake! Thank you very much for sending in your composition. I really appreciate the effort. Keep it up!
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T. Gracelyn
>>correct
Some people insist that it\'s not true, because the success needs many things to accomplished not only intelligence.
>>Some people insist that it\'s not true because
But, I say everything is about intelligence, for instance, \"effort\" can be a different type of intelligence.
>>But I can say that everything is about intelligence. Exerting effort is a different thing.
If somebody efforts a lot to success, then it means he is smart enough to know what he wants to do.
>>If somebody exerts efforts to be successful, then it means he is smart enough to know what he wants to do.
Same as this, \"lucky\" can be a different type of it.
>>Being lucky or fortunate is also different.
If somebody\'s got lucky, it means he is already qualified to get it.
>>If somebody is lucky it means he is already qualified to get it.
And I think he\'d been trying to do something to be deserved that.
>>And I think he\'d been trying to do something so he deserves it.
So, if someone doesn\'t effort anything, I will say he is not intelligent.
>>So if someone doesn\'t exert effort in everything he/she does, I must say that he is not intelligent.
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