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2018-06-13 · 첨삭 강사 Jean

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Being able to vote is imporatant because it causes illusion to people that they are included in the politics. It doesn't matter if it is true or not. What is important is that voting makes people believe that they can take a part in making a better world. Voting is also important for the government too. When people directly vote a candidate, it means that they approve of the representative. This causes people to obey and listen to the government more.

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Jean



Being able to vote is imporatant because it causes illusion to people that they are included in the politics.

>> Being able to vote is important because it causes an illusion to people that they are included in politics.


 It doesn\'t matter if it is true or not.

>> correct


What is important is that voting makes people believe that they can take a part in making a better world.

>> correct


Voting is also important for the government too.

>> Voting is important for the government, too.


When people directly vote a candidate, it means that they approve of the representative.

>> correct


This causes people to obey and listen to the government more.

>> correct

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