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Some people think that women are generally more peaceful than men as their characters are naturally more nurturing than aggressive. Do you agree?
I agree with the opinion. Generally women tend to be more peaceful than men. I think it's coming from natrual characteristic. In the past, men had more responsibilities to support their family. So they went hunting to keep their family alive. And they had to exercise and practice to hunt successful. And after countries showed up, physical strength became more important. Countries started to fight with each other for more property and wealth. Men had to service in the army for it. So they've been having more opportunities to compete with the others since long long time ago. I think this causes that men have more aggressive characteristic than women.
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Hello Jake. Thank you very much for sending in your composition.
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T. Gracelyn
I agree with the opinion.
>>correct
Generally, women tend to be more peaceful than men.
>>correct
I think it\'s coming from natural characteristic.
>>I think it\'s already common for most women.
In the past, men had more responsibilities to support their family.
>>correct
So they went hunting to keep their family alive.
>>correct
>>So they went to hunt to support/feed their family.
And they had to exercise and practice to hunt successful.
>>They also had to exercise and practice how to hunt successfully.
And after countries showed up, physical strength became more important.
Countries started to fight with each other for more property and wealth.
>>Countries started to have territorial disputes.
Men had to service in the army for it.
>>Men have to serve in the military.
So they\'ve been having more opportunities to compete with the others a long time ago.
>>correct
I think this causes that men have more aggressive characteristic than women.
>>I think these are some of the reasons why men are more aggressive than women.
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