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2018-06-20 · 첨삭 강사 Klein

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What makes a good soccer team? ==> Soccer team players consist of 11 members. In soccer, each team member must have individual skills and the team has a organizational power. Both individual skills and organizational power are very important thing when they play soccer. And they have to practice very much and they have many strategy for playing soccer. Because of that, the soccer coach has a leadership and he has to very smart. When the 2002 World Cup in Seoul, Korean team ranked 4th. The coach "Hidink" has a great leadership and the members believe the coach. They practiced very much and they showed their ability in the playing ground. It was a good example that how team is a good soccer team.

강사 첨삭

You\'re really into soccer, James! You even stayed up so late just to finish the game. Please take a nap when you can today.

Thanks for sharing so much! I feel I watched the game with your vivid description. Your storytelling skills are remarkable!

Let\'s do it again next time.

Have a good one!

-Klein-

What makes a good soccer team?
 ==>
 Soccer team players consist of 11 members.

>>Soccer teams consist of 11 members or players.
 In soccer, each team member must have individual skills and the team has a organizational power.

>>In soccer, each team member must have individual skills and the team must have an organizational power.
 Both individual skills and organizational power are very important thing when they play soccer.
>>Both individual skills and organizational power are very important when they play soccer. 

And they have to practice very much and they have many strategy for playing soccer.
>>They have to practice very much or hard and have many strategies for playing soccer. 

Because of that, the soccer coach has a leadership and he has to very smart.
>>Because of that, the soccer coach has leadership and he has to be very smart.

When the 2002 World Cup in Seoul, Korean team ranked 4th.

>>In the 2002 World Cup in Seoul, Korean team ranked 4th. 
The coach \"Hidink\" has a great leadership and the members believe the coach.

>>Coach \"Hidink\" has great leadership and the members believe him.
 They practiced very much and they showed their ability in the playing ground.

>>Correct
 It was a good example that how team is a good soccer team.

>>It was a good example for a good soccer team.

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