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You\'re really into soccer, James! You even stayed up so late just to finish the game. Please take a nap when you can today.
Thanks for sharing so much! I feel I watched the game with your vivid description. Your storytelling skills are remarkable!
Let\'s do it again next time.
Have a good one!
-Klein-
What makes a good soccer team?
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Soccer team players consist of 11 members.
>>Soccer teams consist of 11 members or players.
In soccer, each team member must have individual skills and the team has a organizational power.
>>In soccer, each team member must have individual skills and the team must have an organizational power.
Both individual skills and organizational power are very important thing when they play soccer.
>>Both individual skills and organizational power are very important when they play soccer.
And they have to practice very much and they have many strategy for playing soccer.
>>They have to practice very much or hard and have many strategies for playing soccer.
Because of that, the soccer coach has a leadership and he has to very smart.
>>Because of that, the soccer coach has leadership and he has to be very smart.
When the 2002 World Cup in Seoul, Korean team ranked 4th.
>>In the 2002 World Cup in Seoul, Korean team ranked 4th.
The coach \"Hidink\" has a great leadership and the members believe the coach.
>>Coach \"Hidink\" has great leadership and the members believe him.
They practiced very much and they showed their ability in the playing ground.
>>Correct
It was a good example that how team is a good soccer team.
>>It was a good example for a good soccer team.
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