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ESSAY: What is your definition of 'risk'? Are you a risk taker? Why/why not? What are the advantages/disadvantages of taking risks? What risks have you taken in your life?
I think risk is kind of a challenge.
because they have common state like "break stability."
I like familiar place, I pursue foods what I always eat.
so, I'm not a risk taker.
The advantages of taking risks are development and self-satisfaction.
Risk makes new things what we ever didn't see and find places where we ever didn't know.
people can growth by mistakes. and be proud of their challenge.
The disadvantages are dangerous and need time or money.
I don't make the event that called a risk.
but sometimes I challenge to change my job.
Turn is too hard to me and make a lot of stress.
when I get bad result even though I try hard, I had a lot of dissapointed.
so I don't want to make a risk if possible
강사 첨삭
Hello Kelly. Thank you for answering the homework. ^_^ Sometimes, taking a risk is good but of course we don\'t want that.
~T. IRENE~
ESSAY: What is your definition of \'risk\'? Are you a risk taker? Why/why not? What are the advantages/disadvantages of taking risks? What risks have you taken in your life?
I think risk is kind of a challenge.
>>> Correct.
>>> I think risk is like the word challenge.
because they have common state like \"break stability.\"
>>> This is because they have a common meaning, that is \"to break stability.\"
I like familiar place, I pursue foods what I always eat.
>>> I like familiar places and I always eat my favorite food in there.
so, I\'m not a risk taker.
>>> Correct.
The advantages of taking risks are development and self-satisfaction.
>>> The advantages of taking risks are personal development and self-satisfaction.
Risk makes new things what we ever didn\'t see and find places where we ever didn\'t know.
>>> Taking risks make us discover new things that we haven\'t seen before and go to places that we have never traveled to in the past.
people can growth by mistakes. and be proud of their challenge.
>>> People can learn and grow from their mistakes and in the end they feel proud of these challenges.
The disadvantages are dangerous and need time or money.
>>> The disadvantages are, it could dangerous and needs more time and/or money.
I don\'t make the event that called a risk.
>>> I don\'t create the events where I need to take a risk or risks.
but sometimes I challenge to change my job.
>>> But sometimes I am challenged to change my job.
Turn is too hard to me and make a lot of stress.
>>> Change is a bit hard and stressful for me.
when I get bad result even though I try hard, I had a lot of dissapointed.
>>> Whenever I get bad results even when I tried my best, I feel very disappointed.
so I don\'t want to make a risk if possible
>>> So as much as possible, I don\'t like taking risks.
~T. IRENE~
ESSAY: What is your definition of \'risk\'? Are you a risk taker? Why/why not? What are the advantages/disadvantages of taking risks? What risks have you taken in your life?
I think risk is kind of a challenge.
>>> Correct.
>>> I think risk is like the word challenge.
because they have common state like \"break stability.\"
>>> This is because they have a common meaning, that is \"to break stability.\"
I like familiar place, I pursue foods what I always eat.
>>> I like familiar places and I always eat my favorite food in there.
so, I\'m not a risk taker.
>>> Correct.
The advantages of taking risks are development and self-satisfaction.
>>> The advantages of taking risks are personal development and self-satisfaction.
Risk makes new things what we ever didn\'t see and find places where we ever didn\'t know.
>>> Taking risks make us discover new things that we haven\'t seen before and go to places that we have never traveled to in the past.
people can growth by mistakes. and be proud of their challenge.
>>> People can learn and grow from their mistakes and in the end they feel proud of these challenges.
The disadvantages are dangerous and need time or money.
>>> The disadvantages are, it could dangerous and needs more time and/or money.
I don\'t make the event that called a risk.
>>> I don\'t create the events where I need to take a risk or risks.
but sometimes I challenge to change my job.
>>> But sometimes I am challenged to change my job.
Turn is too hard to me and make a lot of stress.
>>> Change is a bit hard and stressful for me.
when I get bad result even though I try hard, I had a lot of dissapointed.
>>> Whenever I get bad results even when I tried my best, I feel very disappointed.
so I don\'t want to make a risk if possible
>>> So as much as possible, I don\'t like taking risks.
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