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2018-07-06 · 첨삭 강사 Klein

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What are the activities that one could enjoy in Seoul, South Korea? ==> There are a lot of things to do in Seoul. When I was staying at my son\'s room in Seoul with my family, we went Lotte amusement park and we enjoyed our time very pleasantly. And we went to an old palace in Seoul. In the old palace, there are many points to see. I think It is good education for my children. We can see how my ancestors lived in old times. And there are big market in Seoul called dongdaemun. We can buy several things cheaply. There are many sightseeings in Seoul, a lot of people visit there.

강사 첨삭

Thank you for sending this! I appreciate the effort once more. Seems like you really had a great time visiting Seoul. I wish I could go there and personally experience those things someday. Again, thank you for sharing!

How are you feeling now?

Please snatch more hours of rest this coming weekend.

Keep safe!

-Klein-

What are the activities that one could enjoy in Seoul, South Korea?
==>
There are a lot of things to do in Seoul.

>> Correct

OR >> There are various things to do in Seoul.
>> There are various things to enjoy in Seoul.
>> There are tons of things you can do in Seoul.
When I was staying at my son\'s room in Seoul with my family, we went Lotte amusement park and we enjoyed our time very pleasantly.

>> Correct

OR >> When I was staying at my son\'s room in Seoul with my family, we went to Lotte Amusement Park and we had a pleasant time.
>> When I stayed at my son\'s Place in Seoul with my family, we went to Lotte Amusement Park and had an enjoyable time.
>> When I stayed at my son\'s Place in Seoul with my family, we went to Lotte Amusement Park and had an amazing time.
And we went to an old palace in Seoul.
>> Correct

OR >> We went to an old palace in Seoul, as well.
>> We also went to a traditional palace in Seoul.
>> We also visited a traditional palace in Seoul.
In the old palace, there are many points to see.

>> Correct

>> There are many things to see there in the palace.
>>
There are many points to see there in the palace.
I think It is good education for my children.
>> Correct

OR >> I think it was quite educational for my children.
>> I think it served as good education for my children.
>> I think it was a good source of education for my children.
We can see how my ancestors lived in old times.
>> We could see how our ancestors lived in the past.
>>
We could see how our ancestors lived in the old days.
And there are big market in Seoul called dongdaemun.
>> There is also a big market in Seoul called Dongdaemun.
We can buy several things cheaply.
>> We can buy several things at a cheap price.
>> We can buy various things at an affordable price.
There are many sightseeings in Seoul, a lot of people visit there.
>> There are many sightseeing spots in Seoul that a lot of people visit.
>> There are many spots for sightseeing that people can visit in Seoul.

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