homework
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]!
Thank you for sharing your ideas about the internet. Have a good day!
~t. Kelly^^
What is the importance of internet in your country? What impact does it have for children and teenagers? Answer in no more than FIVE (5) sentences.
Our country is a powerful nation of IT.
>> Our country is advanced in the field of I.T.
So,everywhere has WIFI and we use the internet very much.
>> So there is WIFI everywhere and we use the internet very much.
And,most of the school in Korea use the internet.
>> And there is internet connection in most schools in Korea.
So,we can learn very interesting.
>> So learning becomes more interesting.
But also,there are many serious problem in Korea.
>> But there are also many serious problems that our country is facing.
The teenagers has the game addiction.
>> One is game addiction among teenagers.
I am the gamr addiction,too.
>> I am addicted to online games, too.
And everywhere has the DATA and WIFI and many electronic devices.
>> Because everywhere we can access DATA and WIFI and there are many electronic devices as well.
So,there are problem about electromagnetic waves.
>> So there are problems related to electromagnetic waves.
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