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2018-07-18 · 첨삭 강사 Gracelyn

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Essay Writing: Some people think that dangerous sports should be banned, while others think people should be free to choose. What is your opinion? Since we live in a libral society, everyone's choices should be respected, even if it can harm ourselves. If someone wants to play dangerous sports, it's his responsibility. No one has the right to ban his freedom. But sometimes, governments forbid going to some places. I think those kinds of places must have had reasons for it. For example, many people may have drowned in the place. Or there may be many dangerous animals that attack people. Even though the goverment forbided going in the area, many people who wanted to have special experiences went in the place and played. It's very hard to catch them and it might be wasting time and money. So, I think the goverment should put a notice how the area is dangerous and just let them go by their own choices.

강사 첨삭

Hello there Jake. Great Wednesday to you!
Thank you once again for patiently doing your homework. Keep it up!
I will talk to you later.
T. Gracelyn 

Since we live in a liberal society, everyone\'s choices should be respected, even if it can harm ourselves. 
>>correct
If someone wants to play dangerous sports, it\'s his responsibility. 
>>correct
No one has the right to ban his freedom.
>>correct
But sometimes, governments forbid going to some places. 
>>However, sometimes the government bans people to go to some places.
I think those kinds of places must have had reasons for it. 
>>I think they have reasons why.
For example, many people may have drowned in the place. 
>>correct
Or there may be many dangerous animals that attack people.
>>correct
Even though the government forbidden going in the area, many people who wanted to have special experiences went in the place and played. 
>>Even though the government bans people from going to some places, many people who wanted to have special experiences still go to the place.
It\'s very hard to catch them and it might be wasting time and money. 
>>It\'s very hard to catch them and it might be a waste of time and money.
So, I think the government should put a notice how the area is dangerous and just let them go by their own choices.
>>correct

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