Homework

2018-07-18 · 첨삭 강사 Eunice

학생이 쓴 원문

HOMEWORK: WRITING TASK! ~ What does your country do to reduce the use of plastic? Our country has made an effort to reduce the use of plastic since the end of the 20th. Goverment enforced a separate garbage collection law in 1995. And They chrarhed fee for dumping trash simultaneusly. It makes that amount of plastic usage could be decreased. and many of used plactic can be recycled & reused. Nowdays plastic bag is not for free in the mart & convenience store. If they provides plastic bag as free, They will get punished. Plastic is hard to decompose in the land. When plastic is incinerated, harmful gas is generated. It can bad infuluence people's health. Reduing the use of plastic is very important for our future.

강사 첨삭

This is an eye-opening topic, Sir [이름]!

Yes, plastic materials have been dominating landfills over time because it would take thousands of years for them to be broken down in soil. We don\'t want to wake up one day where all that we see from the outside are mountains of trash. Thank you for sharing this piece with me. Have a smooth sailing day!

~Teacher Eunice  


Our country has made an effort to reduce the use of plastic since the end of the 20th.
>>> 
Correct!

>>> OR: Our country has made an effort to reduce the use of plastic since the end of the 20th century.

Goverment enforced a separate garbage collection law in 1995. And They chrarhed fee for dumping trash simultaneusly.
>>> The government enforced a separate garbage collection law in 1995, and they charged fee for dumping trash simultaneously.  
It makes that amount of plastic usage could be decreased. and many of used plactic can be recycled & reused.
>>>
It makes that amount of plastic usage be decreased, and many of the used plastics can be recycled & reused.

Nowdays plastic bag is not for free in the mart & convenience store.

>>> Nowadays, plastic bags are not for free in the mart & convenience stores.  
If they provides plastic bag as free, They will get punished.
>>>
If they will provide plastic bags for free, they will get punished. 
Plastic is hard to decompose in the land.

>>> Plastic is hard to decompose in land. 

>>> OR: Plastic materials are hard to decompose in landfills.

When plastic is incinerated, harmful gas is generated.

>>> When plastics were incinerated, harmful gas will be generated.

It can bad infuluence people\'s health. 

>>> It can be a bad influence for people\'s health.

>>> OR: It can harm people\'s health. 

Reduing the use of plastic is very important for our future.

>>> Reducing the use of plastic is very important for our future. 

파워잉글리쉬 영어첨삭교정 서비스에 실제로 접수된 글입니다. 작성자와 글에 등장하는 사람·회사 이름, 연락처 등 개인을 알아볼 수 있는 정보는 모두 지웠습니다. 문법 오류는 학습 자료로서의 가치를 위해 원문 그대로 두었습니다.

다른 영어첨삭교정 보기

영어첨삭교정 ·