homework
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Essay Writing:
As a result of tourism, many historical buildings and sites are being damaged beyond repair. What could be done to prevent this?
Since transportation technology has been developing, there are more and more people who enjoy go to famous travel spots. Especailly some Southeast Asia countries' environment have been ruined by travelers because their cheap price. For exmaple, Boracay which is a beautiful island of Philippine will be closed until next month because of pollution.
When I hear these kinds of news, I am afraid that our planet gets sick. So i've thought how can we prevent all of this. First, the goverment should limit the population of tourists in special locations. And, it needs to grow the budgets for protecting environment. Last thing, the most important factor is that tourists must learn why we protect our nature and environment.
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>>Since transportation technology has been developing, there are more and more people who enjoy travelling/going to famous tourist spots.
Especially some Southeast Asia countries\' environment have been ruined by travelers because their cheap price.
>>Most environment in Southeast Asia countries have been ruined by travelers because of its cheap price.
For example, Boracay which is a beautiful island of Philippine will be closed until next month because of pollution.
>>For example, Boracay, a beautiful island in the Philippine, was closed until next month because of pollution.
When I hear these kinds of news, I am afraid that our planet gets sick.
>>For example, Boracay, a beautiful island in the Philippine, was closed until next month because of pollution.
When I hear these kinds of news, I am afraid that our planet gets sick.
>>When I hear these kinds of news, I am afraid that our planet is in danger.
So I\'ve thought how can we prevent all of this.
>>correct
First, the government should limit the population of tourists in special locations.
>>correct
>>First, the government should limit the number of tourists in popular tourist spots.
And, it needs to grow the budgets for protecting environment.
>>And they need to increase the budget for protecting the environment.
Last thing, the most important factor is that tourists must learn why we protect our nature and environment.
>>Lastly, the most important factor is that tourists must learn why we need to protect our nature and environment.
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