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The most common dream for children in korea is to be a celebrity.
>> The most common dream for children in Korea is to be a celebrity.
One reason why they want to be a celebrity is because if they seucess, they earn a lot of money.
>> One reason why they want to be a celebrity is because if they succeed, they can earn a lot of money.
Children, including teenagers, see celebities on TV.
>> correct
They immitate popular celebrities, and some wants to become a popular celebrity.
>> They immitate popular celebrities, and some want to become a popular celebrity.
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