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2018-07-25 · 첨삭 강사 Charry

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Actually, whenever I drink soju, so strong that I mix it with beer. In Korea, it is called " somac" Have you heard of it? >_< I didn't read the textbook today, but it was a lot of fun. Thank you for correcting my mistake. ^0^ Wow .. Today topic is very interesting. Actually, I don't have much greed. I also hate to count money. So I don't do general affairs. But if I had money all over the world ... I buy nice house, car, clothes, etc. I also travel around the world. And I want to give it to my parents. The rest of the money is left to a competent expert. I want to use it efficiently.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]!

I\'m glad to know that you enjoyed our free-talking class tonight. 

You were stressed the whole day and I think freely talking to each other helped you to ease a little. :)
I\'ve heard of \"somac\" and I\'ve also tried it a few times but I still think it\'s too strong. kkk.

Anyway, having all the money in the world seems to be really great.

If I had all the money in the world, I would probably invest a portion of it, use it for traveling, provide a safe trust fund for my family and spend the rest for charities. ^^

I hope you\'re having a great night. See you again tomorrow. :)

~Teacher Charry

Actually, whenever I drink soju, so strong that I mix it with beer. 

>> Actually, whenever I drink soju, I feel that it\'s so strong that I have to mix it with beer. 

OR >> Actually, whenever I drink soju, I feel that it\'s too strong so I mix it with beer. 
In Korea, it is called \" somac\"

>> In Korea, it is called \" somac\".

Have you heard of it? >_<

>> CORRECT!

OR >> Are you familiar with it?
I didn\'t read the textbook today, but it was a lot of fun.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> I didn\'t study the textbook today but I had so much fun in class.

Thank you for correcting my mistake. ^0^

>> CORRECT!

OR >> Thank you for giving me corrections. ^0^

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Wow .. Today topic is very interesting.

>> Wow! Today\'s topic is very interesting.
Actually, I don\'t have much greed.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> Actually, I am not a greedy person.
I also hate to count money.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> I also dislike counting money.
So I don\'t do general affairs.

>> That\'s why I don\'t do general affairs.
But if I had money all over the world ... I buy nice house, car, clothes, etc.

>> But if I had all the money in the world, I will buy a nice house, a car, some clothes, etc.
I also travel around the world.

>> I will also travel around the world.
And I want to give it to my parents.

>> I also want to give some to my parents.
The rest of the money is left to a competent expert.

>> The rest of the money left will be in the care of a competent expert.
I want to use it efficiently.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> I want to wisely use it.  

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