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2018-07-26 · 첨삭 강사 Grace

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What would the world be like without the Internet? If there were no internet in the world, our lives would be very inconvenient. These days many people are using the internet to get information when they are working. And they are buying everything they need. If the internet disappeared, they would into confusion, because when they need information, they have to look over some articles or books at libraries and they have to go to the market to buy something even if the market is very far.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]^^

Please check your corrections below

If there were no internet in the world, our lives would be very inconvenient.

>> If there is no internet in the world, our lives would be very inconvenient.

These days many people are using the internet to get information when they are working. And they are buying everything they need. If the internet disappeared, they would into confusion, because when they need information, they have to look over some articles or books at libraries and they have to go to the market to buy something even if the market is very far.

>> These days, many people are using the internet to get information, when they are working and if they want to use the internet to access online shops to buy their needs. If the internet will disappear,they would into confusion, because when they need information, they have to look over some articles or books at the library and they have to go to the market to buy something even if the market is very far.

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