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2018-07-30 · 첨삭 강사 Charry

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I learned conversation protocol on Monday, but I couldn't think of an answer. I went to work yesterday and now I'm reviewing it. T_T I hope you arrived home safely. It's raining for a while on Saturday, but it stops here so it's humid. I'm not good enough yet, but I've looked for a lot of data. I hope you enjoy your weekend. ^_^ When I think of Suwon, I think of "Suwon Hwaseong Fortress". It occupies the heart of downtown Suwon. First of all, it is amazing that it is the world's first planned new city. A king named "Jeong-jo" tried to build a new city next to the tomb in his devotion to his father. It started in February 1794 and was completed in two and a half years. He used all the capabilities and scientific skills of his time. He invented the "Geojunggi", a type of crane, to build the Suwon Hwaseong Fortress. It is now a UNESCO World Heritage Site. Personally, I like Jeong-jo of the Joseon Dynasty, the more I learn about his achievements, the more surprising I am.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]!

It\'s Monday again. ^_^

How are you feeling so far?

I am always grateful for your efforts in class.

You answer my calls and study with me even if you are tired.

I am impressed with your essay.

You\'ve created a lot of great sentences and your answer to our essay question was very good.

I think the Joseon Dynasty is the epitome of the Korean civilization.

Jeong Jo is a great leader.

I hope you\'re having a great day.
See you in class later. ^_^

~Teacher Charry :)

I learned conversation protocol on Monday, but I couldn\'t think of an answer.

>> CORRECT!
I went to work yesterday and now I\'m reviewing it. T_T

>> CORRECT!
I hope you arrived home safely.

>> CORRECT!
It\'s raining for a while on Saturday, but it stops here so it\'s humid.

>> It rained for a while on Saturday but it already stopped so it\'s humid.
I\'m not good enough yet, but I\'ve looked for a lot of data.

>> CORRECT!
I hope you enjoy your weekend. ^_^

>> CORRECT!
When I think of Suwon, I think of \"Suwon Hwaseong Fortress\".

>> CORRECT!
It occupies the heart of downtown Suwon.

>> CORRECT!
First of all, it is amazing that it is the world\'s first planned new city.

>> CORRECT!
A king named \"Jeong-jo\" tried to build a new city next to the tomb in his devotion to his father.

>> A king named \"Jeong-jo\" tried to build a new city next to the tomb in devotion to his father.
It started in February 1794 and was completed in two and a half years.

>> CORRECT!
He used all the capabilities and scientific skills of his time.

>> CORRECT!
He invented the \"Geojunggi\", a type of crane, to build the Suwon Hwaseong Fortress.

>> CORRECT!
It is now a UNESCO World Heritage Site.

>> CORRECT!
Personally, I like Jeong-jo of the Joseon Dynasty, the more I learn about his achievements, the more surprising I am.

>> Personally, I like Jeong-jo of the Joseon Dynasty because the more I learn about his achievements, the more surprised I am.

OR >> Personally, I like Jeong-jo of the Joseon Dynasty. The more I learn about his achievements, the more surprised I am.

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