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2018-07-31 · 첨삭 강사 Kate

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HOMEWORK: Does it bother you that people gamble on sporting events? Why? Many people who like watching sports games tend to play gambling on sports events. Some of my friends suggest a tiny gambling when a big sports event holds on. In this game, winners can have free dinner. I think we can enjoy it unless winner's prize is getting bigger than this. On the other hand, a few of my friends and colleagues like to use illegal gambling site because it gives more prize. I know that this will turn out very bad consequnces. Thus, I try to stop them but it doesn't work very well. For example, one of my friend had a colleague who addicted the gambling. He borrowed a lot of money from his surrounding people for it. Even my friend have lended him more than five millions won because the co-worker said he had had emergency problem to solve immediately. Finally it ended up very bad. His debts added up to a half of billion won and he decied to kill by himself. That's why I don't like gambling.

강사 첨삭

Hello!

Thank you for doing your homework. You did great! Keep it up and have a wonderful evening.


~~Teacher Kate


1. Many people who like watching sports games tend to play gambling on sports events.

>>>CORRECT!

OR>>>Many sports enthusiasts tend to gamble on sports events.

2. Some of my friends suggest a tiny gambling when a big sports event holds on.

>>>Some of my friends gamble a little whenever we watch big sporting events.

3. In this game, winners can have free dinner.

>>>CORRECT!

OR>>>The winners of the game can have free dinner.

4. I think we can enjoy it unless winner\'s prize is getting bigger than this.

>>>I think we can enjoy it unless the prize becomes bigger than this.

5. On the other hand, a few of my friends and colleagues like to use illegal gambling sites because it gives more prizes.

>>>CORRECT!

6. I know that this will turn out very bad consequnces.

>>>I know that this will have negative consequences.

7. Thus, I try to stop them but it doesn\'t work very well.

>>>Although I try to stop them, it doesn\'t work.

8. For example, one of my friend had a colleague who addicted the gambling.

>>>For example, one of my friends had a colleague who became addicted to gambling.

9. He borrowed a lot of money from his surrounding people for it.

>>>He borrowed a lot of money from people he knew.

10. Even my friend have lended him more than five millions won because the co-worker said he had had emergency problem to solve immediately.

>>>My friend lent him more than five million won because his co-worker said he had an emergency.

11. Finally it ended up very bad.

>>>It ended up in disaster.

12. His debts added up to a half of billion won and he decied to kill by himself.

>>>His debts added up to half a billion won and he decided to kill himself.

13. That\'s why I don\'t like gambling.

>>>CORRECT!

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