HOMEWORK! ^^

2018-07-31 · 첨삭 강사 Charry

학생이 쓴 원문

Dear Teacher Charry, ^_^ I am very tired because I had a nightmare yesterday. T_T So I need to go to bed early. I hope you have a comfortable evening, too. <If you could relive one moment in your life, what would it be? Why?> It was my birthday in elementary school. I went to a fancy restaurant for the first time. Usually, my father spent less money. But he bought them all that day. Almost 20 years ago, ice cream was 5,000 won. I took a picture with V. All my family were happy. In fact, Since I was a child, my memory is not clear. But I felt my father's love. I also want to see my parents ' face when they were young. Now that I think about it, it's a precious memory.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]! ^_^

Thank you for writing a nice essay even if  you\'re dead on your feet tonight.

I\'m sorry to hear that you had a nightmare last night.

It must have been difficult for you to go back to sleep again.

What was the nightmare all about?

Anyhow, I think your memory about your childhood is beautiful.

Have a restful night too.

See you again tomorrow. ^_^

~Teacher Charry

Dear Teacher Charry, ^_^

>> CORRECT!

I am very tired because I had a nightmare yesterday. T_T

>> CORRECT!

So I need to go to bed early. 

>> CORRECT!
I hope you have a comfortable evening, too.
>> CORRECT!
< If you could relive one moment in your life, what would it be? Why?>
It was my birthday in elementary school.

>> CORRECT!
I went to a fancy restaurant for the first time.

>> CORRECT!
Usually, my father spent less money.

>> My father usually spent less money.
But he bought them all that day.

>> But he bought everything I wanted that day.
Almost 20 years ago, ice cream was 5,000 won.

>> Almost 20 years ago, an ice cream cost 5,000 won.
I took a picture with V.

>> I took a picture with a V sign.
All my family were happy.

>> All of my family members were happy.
In fact, Since I was a child, my memory is not clear.

>> In fact, my childhood memory is not clear.
But I felt my father\'s love.

>> CORRECT!
I also want to see my parents \' face when they were young.

>> CORRECT!
Now that I think about it, it\'s a precious memory.

>> CORRECT!

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