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The employment rate in Korea has been crisis since late 1990s.

>>> The employment rate in Korea has been a crisis since late 1990s.

So many companies were bankrupt at those days, and even now, the unemployment rate in Korea is higher than ever before.

>>> So many companies were bankrupt in those days, and even now, the unemployment rate in Korea is higher than ever before.

But there are many jobs out there in Korea, so i think the most important factor that affects the unemployment rate in Korea is the matter of personal choice.

>>> But there are many jobs out there in Korea, so I think the most important factor that affects the unemployment rate in Korea is the matter of one\'s personal choice.

Most people,including me, don\'t want to work under the bad conditions.

>>> Most people, including me, don\'t want to work under bad conditions.

But, sometimes, it is necessary to work hard in anywhere someone was needed to achieve one\'s final goal.

>>> But, sometimes, it is necessary to work hard anywhere to achieve one\'s final goal.