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2018-08-17 · 첨삭 강사 Blair

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Is gun control an effective way to control the crime? I think it is effective. Gun has the different meaning from other weapons such as knives, bats and axes. Other weapons are basically made for their own purpose which is not murder. But the gun's main purpose is to kill people no matter what the owner wants to use it for attack or defend. So guns should be treated in different way. In addition, there are not only crime planned and prepared. Some crimes happen on impulse. In that case, guns unregulated will be the quickest way for impulsive criminals to use.

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Hi there Jacob ~~

See you in class later.

- Blair

Is gun control an effective way to control the crime?
I think it is effective. Gun has the different meaning from other weapons such as knives, bats and axes. Other weapons are basically made for their own purpose which is not murder. But the gun\'s main purpose is to kill people no matter what the owner wants to use it for attack or defend. So guns should be treated in different way. In addition, there are not only crime planned and prepared. Some crimes happen on impulse. In that case, guns unregulated will be the quickest way for impulsive criminals to use.

I think it is effective. Gun has a different meaning/impact from other weapons such as knives, bats and axes. Other weapons are basically made for their own purpose which is not for murder. But the gun\'s main purpose is to kill people no matter what the owner wants to use it for attacks or defends. So guns should be treated in different way. In addition, there are not only crime planned and prepared. Some crimes happen on impulse. In that case, guns unregulated will be the quickest way for impulsive criminals to use.

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