homework!
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What kind of discipline do Korean parents give their children? What is your opinion about corporal punishment? Explain.
Well I think this topic is quite difficult yet interesting. My opinion about corporal punishment is disagreement. since early times ,there was corporal punishment in korea like giving the cane on the calves. When i was a student, i also experienced it. In addition, i was beaten except my face. Of course, i understand my parents to do this. They really wanted to me a better person and take right way. But, whenever i remind the situation that i was beaten ,it makes me offensive and aggressive.
In some westeren countries, corporal punishment is illegal, which means it's possible to educate childeren rightly without corporal punishment.
Therefore, i disagree corporal punishment.
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Happy Monday Moon! Thanks for sending this composition. ^_^ T\'was nice of you to send me your composition. Thanks! Brrrr.. It\'s so cold in here. It\'s still raining. Thank God there are no reports of landslides or accidents brought about by the rain, YET. ^_^ I heard this cool and wet season is also affecting your weather. Cold winds are now passing through your country. That\'s good. ^_^
~T. Irene~
What kind of discipline do Korean parents give their children? What is your opinion about corporal punishment? Explain.
Well I think this topic is quite difficult yet interesting.
>>> Correct.
My opinion about corporal punishment is disagreement.
>>> I disagree with corporal punishment.
since early times ,there was corporal punishment in korea like giving the cane on the calves.
>>> Since the early times, corporal punishment has always been present in Korea. One example of this is caning of the calves.
When I was a student, I also experienced it.
>>> Correct.
In addition, i was beaten except my face.
>>> Aside from that, I was also beaten all over except on my face.
Of course, i understand my parents to do this.
>>> Of course, I do understand why my parents did this.
They really wanted to me a better person and take right way.
>>> They really wanted me to be a better person.
But, whenever i remind the situation that i was beaten ,it makes me offensive and aggressive.
>>> However, whenever I am reminded of that time when I was beaten, I become offensive and aggressive.
In some westeren countries, corporal punishment is illegal, which means it\'s possible to educate childeren rightly without corporal punishment.
>>> In some western countries, corporal punishment is illegal. This means, they educate children without using corporal punishment.
Therefore, i disagree corporal punishment.
>>> In light of this, I won\'t agree with the use of corporal punishment.
~T. Irene~
What kind of discipline do Korean parents give their children? What is your opinion about corporal punishment? Explain.
Well I think this topic is quite difficult yet interesting.
>>> Correct.
My opinion about corporal punishment is disagreement.
>>> I disagree with corporal punishment.
since early times ,there was corporal punishment in korea like giving the cane on the calves.
>>> Since the early times, corporal punishment has always been present in Korea. One example of this is caning of the calves.
When I was a student, I also experienced it.
>>> Correct.
In addition, i was beaten except my face.
>>> Aside from that, I was also beaten all over except on my face.
Of course, i understand my parents to do this.
>>> Of course, I do understand why my parents did this.
They really wanted to me a better person and take right way.
>>> They really wanted me to be a better person.
But, whenever i remind the situation that i was beaten ,it makes me offensive and aggressive.
>>> However, whenever I am reminded of that time when I was beaten, I become offensive and aggressive.
In some westeren countries, corporal punishment is illegal, which means it\'s possible to educate childeren rightly without corporal punishment.
>>> In some western countries, corporal punishment is illegal. This means, they educate children without using corporal punishment.
Therefore, i disagree corporal punishment.
>>> In light of this, I won\'t agree with the use of corporal punishment.
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