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2018-08-20 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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What are the things that you can't live without? I can't live without my family like others. And as you can see, I also can't live without doing paragliding. These are the main things for me to live these days. My family being itself provide emotional stability for me and doing paragliding bring feeling of happiness to me. I think the thing you can't live without is your daughter. Am I right? If you have to say another thing which you can't live without, what would you say? ^^ Maybe from this Wednesday, typoon will come and pass our hometown. Although we have waited rain, my parent are worring about the typoon, because the weather forcast said that it will come with a strong wind and if it is true, the strong wind will ruin our crops.. But some people said that they don't care whether it is typoon or not as long as it can help ease droughts. Anyway, please go to the hospital to check your headache.. Have a great day~! and see you tomorrow!

강사 첨삭

Hello KC!!!

Thank you for your concern but don\'t worry I\'m fine. I guess, it is because I\'m tired.

I hope the typhoon won\'t be that strong. Take care!!!

T. Jeny


What are the things that you can\'t live without? 

>>correct
 I can\'t live without my family like others.

>>correct

And as you can see, I also can\'t live without doing paragliding.

>>correct
 These are the main things for me to live these days.

>>correct

My family being itself provide emotional stability for me and doing paragliding bring feeling of happiness to me.

>>My family being itself provides me emotional stability and doing paragliding brings me happiness.
I think the thing you can\'t live without is your daughter.

>>correct

Am I right? If you have to say another thing which you can\'t live without, what would you say? ^^
>>correct
 Maybe from this Wednesday, typoon will come and pass our hometown.

>>Maybe a typhoon will come and pass our hometown this Wednesday.

Although we have waited rain, my parent are worring about the typoon, because the weather forcast said that it will come with a strong wind and if it is true, the strong wind will ruin our crops..

>>Although, we have been waiting for the rain, my parents are worried about the typhoon because according to the weather forecast it will be strong and it could destroy our crops.
 But some people said that they don\'t care whether it is typoon or not as long as it can help ease droughts.
>>But some people said that they don\'t care whether there is a typhoon or not as long as it can help ease drought.

Anyway, please go to the hospital to check your headache..

>>Anyway, please go to the hospital to check why you have a headache.
 Have a great day~! and see you tomorrow!

>>correct

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