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HOMEWORK: Are rich people influential in the society? Please explain.
I think they are powerful in the society.
CORRECT!
or>>I think they are a very influential force in the society.
Money can makes something better like receiving better education, living in a nice house.
>>Money can give people something better, like receiving a better education, or living in a nice house.
So richer can has chances to expereince easier than other people.
>>So riches can make people’s lives more easier than others.
If they donate money to a worthy cause, these powers make better world saving starvations and they sometimes do this.
>>If they donate money to a worthy cause, their power can create a better world -such as saving hungry people from starvation, and they sometimes do this.
But If they are greedy , it\'s really easy to make the society where rich people only live well.
>>But if they are greedy, it\'s really easy to create a society where only rich people live well.
That\'s why we need a government to control these rich people.
CORRECT!
or>>It\'s the reason why a government is needed, in order to wield a democratic society, to curb the rich from their greed.
For this reasons, i think rich people have some influence in the world
>>For these reasons, I think that the rich people have some influence in the world.
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