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2018-08-28 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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> What is your favorite movie of all time? What makes it your favorite? Matrix is the incomparable movie among movies that I have since watched. The Matrix has three series and that stories are regarding to fighting between mankind and robots. Neo who is the main character in Matrix lived in virtual reality. That is, his spirit was in virtual reality, but his body was reared simultaneously by robots because robots was provided with energy made by human's metabolism. Although those stories are fictitious, it was arranged to movies having impressive story due to meticulous story. In addition, the Matrix have a lot of action scenes that Neo fight with Smith agent. I still have wonder how these actions was made by graphic technology in last 1900s. those are still difficult to be made these days. While I have grown up and understood the profound story on Matrix, I think that is a wonderful movie than thinking it in the past.

강사 첨삭

Hello Jin Young. Matrix is definitely one of the favorite action movies of all time. If someone enacts the scene where the lead character bends backward while trying to avoid the bullet, most people would know it\'s from Matrix. :)

- T. Beth

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Matrix is the incomparable movie among movies that I have since watched.

>>> CORRECT.

>>> OR: Matrix is the most incomparable movie among movies that I have seen by far.       

The Matrix has three series and that stories are regarding to fighting between mankind and robots.

>>> The Matrix has three series and those stories are regarding fights between mankind and robots.

>>> OR: The Matrix has three series and those movies focus on battles between mankind and robots.      

Neo who is the main character in Matrix lived in virtual reality.

>>> Neo, who is the main character in Matrix, lived in virtual reality.      

That is, his spirit was in virtual reality, but his body was reared simultaneously by robots because robots was provided with energy made by human\'s metabolism.

>>> This means, his spirit was in virtual reality, but his body was reared simultaneously by robots because robots were provided with energy made by human\'s metabolism.        

Although those stories are fictitious, it was arranged to movies having impressive story due to meticulous story.

>>> Although the story is fiction, it made movies impressive due to meticulous story plot.       

In addition, the Matrix have a lot of action scenes that Neo fight with Smith agent.

>>>  In addition, the Matrix has a lot of action scenes where Neo fights with agent Smith.    

I still have wonder how these actions was made by graphic technology in last 1900s.

>>> I still have wonder how these action scenes were made by graphic technology in 1900s.     

those are still difficult to be made these days.

>>> OR: Those are still difficult to do these days.     

While I have grown up and understood the profound story on Matrix, I think that is a wonderful movie than thinking it in the past.

>>>  Being a grown up and fully understanding the story of Matrix, I think that it is a wonderful movie and I\'d rather not think of the past.


 

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