homework

2018-08-30 · 첨삭 강사 Michelle

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Make a paragraph with 3-5 sentences about the topic: "My Greatest Dream" My dream is to become an Austrailian nurse and get to a high position. Because I can live a good salary and a comfortable life. I think the human live to be happy. Yet I don’t know what happiness is because I think I should do what I want to do. after all, my ultimate dream is to live happily.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]! Thank you for taking some time to answer the homework. I hope you will be able to be a very good nurse someday. Just continue working hard and one day you will become a successful nurse! Have a good day! I will see you again on our class! ^^,


My dream is to become an Austrailian nurse and get to a high position.

>>> My dream is to become an Australian nurse and have a high position in the hospital I will be working in.


Because I can live a good salary and a comfortable life.

>>> With that, I can have good salary and live a comfortable life.


I think the human live to be happy.

>>> I think the purpose of human life is to be happy.


Yet I don’t know what happiness is because I think I should do what I want to do.

>>> Although I do not know what happiness is because I think I should have freedom to do what I want to do.


after all, my ultimate dream is to live happily.

>>> After all, my ultimate dream is to live happily.

>>> OR After all, my ultimate dream is to live a happy life.


_TEACHER MICHELLE_

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