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2018-09-05 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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> If every person would give a helping hand, would it make this world a better place? How? It is definitely good to give a helping hand to others. I heard that if the 10% people in high rank about property help the rest 90% people regarding financial issue, all people can live without problems about meals. But, I think unconditional supporting is not always good solution. I usually think that the best way to support other people is to teach how to overcome problems oneself. If people were only supported by money without learning the way to solve problem oneself, those will settle for the supporting. It would bring financial mischief in the world. The real supporting would be to acquaint methods for success. If every person aid others not only for giving money but also for teaching the way to overcome problems, it will make this world a better place.

강사 첨삭

Hello Jin Young. Thanks for sending this, I appreciate the effort. You have a point here. There is this famous English saying that goes like this, \"Do not just give them the fish, teach them how to fish.\" This is quite related to your answer. I completely agree with it.

- T. Beth

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It is definitely good to give a helping hand to others.

>>> CORRECT.  

I heard that if the 10% people in high rank about property help the rest 90% people regarding financial issue, all people can live without problems about meals.

>>> I heard that if the 10% of people in high social status help those in the 90% of people who are financially struggling, all people can live without hunger.   

But, I think unconditional supporting is not always good solution.

>>> However, I think unconditional supporting is not always a goo0d solution.  

I usually think that the best way to support other people is to teach how to overcome problems oneself.

>>>  I usually think that the best way to help other people is to teach them how to overcome problems themselves. 

If people were only supported by money without learning the way to solve problem oneself, those will settle for the supporting.

>>> If people were only supported by money without learning the way to solve problem themselves, they will be dependent on receiving support.

It would bring financial mischief in the world.

>>> CORRECT. 

The real supporting would be to acquaint methods for success.

>>> The essence of real support  would be to educate them with methods for success.

If every person aid others not only for giving money but also for teaching the way to overcome problems, it will make this world a better place.

>>> If every person aids others not only by giving money but also by teaching the way to overcome problems, it will make this world a better place.  


 

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