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2018-09-07 · 첨삭 강사 Jeny

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What is your biggest goal in life? How do you plan to achieve that goal? ==> I am a company worker and I have been working at this company for 25 years. I couldn't make time with my family because I was very busy. At that time my biggest goal was that I came home early and played with my children. There were several things to do in the company, so it was very difficult to do like that. And sometimes I had to go to work on weekend. But nowadays working and life balance is very important, so a lot of company workers go home early and they spend their time with their family. I also try to do like that, and I have a dinner with my family. In Korea, company workers keep the working time below 52 hours a week by the law. So I can make time to spend with my family in the evening and my daughter really likes watching me at home in the evening.

강사 첨삭

Hello James,


I would always appreciate the kindness and optimism you\'ve shown.  In addition, you always acknowledge and listen to corrections
given to you. Keep doing that because it would help you a lot to improve faster.

Thank you for your homework.

Always Smile!!!

T. Jeny



What is your biggest goal in life?

>>correct
 How do you plan to achieve that goal?
>>correct
 ==>

I am a company worker and I have been working at this company for 25 years.

>>correct

I couldn\'t make time with my family because I was very busy.

>>correct

At that time my biggest goal was that I came home early and played with my children.

>>At that time my biggest goal was to come home early and play with my children.
 There were several things to do in the company, so it was very difficult to do like that.

>>There were several things to do in the company, so it was difficult for me to do that.
 And sometimes I had to go to work on weekend.

>>And sometimes I had to go to work on the weekends.
 But nowadays working and life balance is very important, so a lot of company workers go home early and they spend their time with their family.

>>But nowadays, finding a balance between work and family is very important, so a lot of company workers go home early and they spend time with their family.
 I also try to do like that, and I have a dinner with my family.

>> I also try to do that and I try to have dinner with my family too.
 In Korea, company workers keep the working time below 52 hours a week by the law.

>>In Korea, company workers should work below 52 hours a week by law.
 So I can make time to spend with my family in the evening and my daughter really likes watching me at home in the evening.

>>So I can make time to spend with my family in the evening and my daughter really likes me to watch with her in the evening.









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