homework
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Essay:
What is the biggest advantage and disadvantage of Freedom of expression?
When the artists express their piece of art, they need to escape their limitation which could be on their mind.
>> When the artists express their piece of art, they need to escape their limitation which could be in their mind.
However, some of people blame them because those piece of arts are out of the social common belief.
>> However, some people blame themselves because those piece of arts are out of the social common belief.
Despite of blaming, some of artists create their arts looking superior by using sexual expression and, they say it is just freedom of expression.
>> Despite the blaming, some artists create their art looking superior by using sexual expression and they say it is just freedom of expression.
That\'s why it has been causing discussion among artists, even general people.
>> Correct
When artists use the \"Freedom of expression\", art\'s industry can be scale out and artists can create more fascinating pieces.
>> When artists use the \"Freedom of expression\", art\'s industry scale out and artists can create more fascinating pieces.
On the other hands, this piece of arts can be blamed by critics and general people.
>>On the other hand, this pieces of art can be blamed by critics and general people.
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