HOMEWORK
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hello Jin Young! Thank you for sending this. I agree with you, a home should be comfortable. You should feel peace and warmth. Someday and hopefully, you\'d be able to have that dream house.
- T. Beth
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I moved to new house a few months ago because water leak into wall at prior house on every rain.
>>> I moved to a new house a few months ago because water leaked from the wall in the previous house every time it rains.
So, I need to decorate my new house using furniture that fit new place well.
>>> So, I need to decorate my new house using furniture that would fit the new place well.
Considering my financial ability, I have to find affordable furniture that have usefulness compared with price.
>>> Considering my financial ability, I have to find affordable furniture that are useful and affordable.
Therefore, it is not important to consider furniture\'s brand to me, but to consider design and price.
>>> OR: Therefore, it is not important for me to consider furniture\'s brand. Rather, to focus on design and price.
Since I think that a comfortable house give a emotion in which I can have peaceful feeling, I\'m interested in design that can give this emotion to me.
>>> CORRECT.
>>> OR: Since I think a comfortable house gives a sense of peace, I\'m interested in designs that can reflect this feeling.
When I see furniture design, it is furniture\'s color for me to consider considerably.
>>> When looking into a furniture\'s design, I consider the color initially.
In my case, I usually used to use black color giving calm emotion to people.
>>> In my case, I was used to black as it gives calm emotion to people.
Also, as light is important part in interior, I prefer bulb than fluorescent light in order to transfer warm feeling to me.
>>> Also, as light is an important part in the interior, I prefer bulb than fluorescent light in order to transfer warmth.
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