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Hi Young! Great job on your work today. I agree with your opinion. I am starting to think that I should be doing some kind of sports very soon. Your sentiments are very convincing. Impressive work! I have very minimal corrections for you and you can check them down below. Have a good day!
~~T. Dee
I think sports is really important because it makes our life happier.
>>I think that doing sports is really important because it makes our life happier.
>>OR: I think that doing sports is really important because it makes us feel good.
To start with, sports help our health stay healthy and refresh our mood.
>>To start with, sports helps keep our bodies stay healthy and it also freshens our mood.
last, Sports can prevent all kinds of diseases .
>>Lastly, sports can help prevent all kinds of diseases.
that\'s why i think sports is a must.
>> These are the reasons why I think that doing sports is a must.
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