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2018-09-20 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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> Why do you think people still consult fortune tellers despite knowing it's not logically true? Everyone have a fear about uncertain future and want to lean on transcendent somebody. Therefore, I think, maybe religions and superstitions came out along with these needs. Fortune teller are also part of those, giving people directions where people abstain toward grim actions and focus on good actions. In my case, although I think consulting with fortune teller is dumb, I don't think all part of that have bad aspects. In people who have no confidence and pride, that can work well in order for those to endure adversity and focus on optimistic something. Without something that can be leaned, these people usually would be engulfed by pessimistic thinking and couldn't do anything because those are afraid about fails.

강사 첨삭

Hello Jin young. Thank you once again for this. It\'s true, consulting a fortune teller could bring hope to some people. I personally don\'t believe in fortune telling. However, it would be nice to give it a try. Just for fun.

- T. Beth

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Everyone have a fear about uncertain future and want to lean on transcendent somebody.

>>>>   Everyone has a fear about the uncertain future and wants to lean on somebody transcendent.   

Therefore, I think, maybe religions and superstitions came out along with these needs.

>>>>  OR: Therefore, I think religions and superstitions probably came to exist along with these needs.     

Fortune teller are also part of those, giving people directions where people abstain toward grim actions and focus on good actions.

>>>>  Fortune tellers are also part of those, giving people directions where people abstain from grim actions and focus on good ones.     

In my case, although I think consulting with fortune teller is dumb, I don\'t think all part of that have bad aspects.

>>>>  OR: In my case, although I think consulting a fortune teller is dumb, I don\'t think everything has bad aspects.     

In people who have no confidence and pride, that can work well in order for those to endure adversity and focus on optimistic something.

>>>> For people who have no confidence or pride, it could work well in order for them to endure adversities and focus on something optimistic.     

Without something that can be leaned, these people usually would be engulfed by pessimistic thinking and couldn\'t do anything because those are afraid about fails.

>>>>  Without something to lean on, these people usually would be engulfed by pessimistic thinking and couldn\'t do anything because they are afraid to fail.    





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