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2018-09-26 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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> Why do you think some people find it interesting to collect things as a hobby? Around my university, there is a man who have a mania on collecting everything. He was appeared on TV about his eccentric hobby that is psychiatric disorder. Because he live on house around my university, I usually watch his house when going to restaurant to eat for dinner. As his house was besiege with all junks, there are not places where he can lie and take a rest. Of course, I don't mean that all people who have a hobby regarding collecting something have psychiatric disorder. I just hope to say that we do not lose our places for taking a rest because of greed on matters. I think taking few things is always better than taking too much. So, I like to sustain surrounding area simply with throwing away unused things.

강사 첨삭

Hello Jin Young. Thank you for this one. Well, in this case, the man is definitely sick in the head. I mean, it\'s not normal. Collecting items like rare coins, postal stamps or art works are okay. They could be a form of investment. If money is not the problem, what item would you like to collect? For me, I want branded sneakers like Nike, Adidas and so on. :) 

- T. Beth

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Around my university, there is a man who have a mania on collecting everything.

>>> Around my university, there is a man who has a mania for collecting everything.   

He was appeared on TV about his eccentric hobby that is psychiatric disorder.

>>>  He appeared on TV for his eccentric hobby and was regarded to as a psychiatric disorder. 

Because he live on house around my university, I usually watch his house when going to restaurant to eat for dinner.

>>>   Because he lives in a house around my university, I could usually see his house when going to the restaurant to eat dinner.

As his house was besiege with all junks, there are not places where he can lie and take a rest.

>>>  As his house was besieged with all junks, there are no places where he can lie and take a rest.

>>> There isn\'t a place for him to lie down and take a rest because his house is filled with junks. 

Of course, I don\'t mean that all people who have a hobby regarding collecting something have psychiatric disorder.

>>>  CORRECT. 

 I just hope to say that we do not lose our places for taking a rest because of greed on matters.

>>>  What I mean is we should not compromise our place to take a rest because of greed on material things. 

I think taking few things is always better than taking too much.

>>>  CORRECT.

So, I like to sustain surrounding area simply with throwing away unused things.

>>> So, I want to sustain simplicity in my surroundings by throwing away unused things.    

 

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