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Hello Jin Young. I appreciate the effort. The telephone has definitely made communication a lot more easier and much more convenient. I look forward to that, using AR technology.
- T. Beth
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When I was elementary school student, I read the book about the Joseon Dynasty where Gojong who is Joseon Dynasty\'s last king received the telephone form America for the first time.
>>> When I was an elementary school student, I read a book about the Joseon Dynasty where Gojong who is Joseon Dynasty\'s last king received the telephone from America for the first time.
When lieges call for him, they knelt in front of telephone during talking on the phone.
>>> When lieges call to him, they knelt in front of the telephone while talking on the phone.
As times have gone by, the way we communicate with other people have been changed considerably.
>>> CORRECT.
>>> OR: As time passed by, the way we communicate with other people has changed considerably.
Only few years ago, we could talk with others through only voice when using cellphone.
>>> CORRECT.
>>> OR: Only few years ago, we could talk to others only through voice when using the cellphone.
But, now we are more familiar with sending text messages through App.
>>> CORRECT.
Furthermore, we can talk with others with face-to-face conversation through video call.
>>> Furthermore, we can talk with others face-to-face through video calls.
I heard that after few years we will be able to take meeting with people using AR technology as if other people exist on same place during call.
>>> I heard that after few years we will be able to take meetings with people using AR technology as if other people exist in the same place during call.
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