homework
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Hi Young! Thank you once again for completing your task. I can feel the sincerity of your concern in your statements. Very good! Check on some corrections I made for you below.
~~T. Dee :)
If there are not any holidays, Our life gradually gets unhappy .
>>If there are no holidays, our lives will gradually be unhappy.
People will lose the passion for a life, easily exhausted and lose the enthusiasm to work.
>>People will lose their passion to live because they will be exhausted and lose their enthusiasm to work.
It result in reduction of Happy Planet Index.
>>It will result in the lower rate of a Happy Planet Index.
On the contrary, The rate of suicide will increase.
>>The rate of suicide will also increase.
The reason we work hard is to get a more happy life.
>>The reason we work hard is to get a more meaningful life.
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