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Hello Jin Young. Thank you for this. I appreciate the effort. So basically, your smartphone is a necessity. Without it, it\'s difficult to perform your tasks on a daily basis. Well, I guess that\'s a common thing for most people these days. We are too dependent on our devices.
- T. Beth
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I don\'t need to think about situation where I can\'t use a cell phone in a week.
>>>> I don\'t need to think of a situation where I can\'t use a cell phone for a week.
Just in a day when I can\'t use it, works for me to operate will be stopped immediately.
>>>> When I can\'t use it in a day, I wouldn\'t immediately be able to proceed with my work.
Also, I will be disconnected with people connected with me because I always communicate with those using phone.
>>>> Also, I will be disconnected to people I always communicate with usignt he phone.
Most of all, I don\'t want to imagine that I can\'t have something to do using smart phone when I\'m on the bus or subways.
>>>> Most of all (Moreover), I don\'t want to imagine that I would have nothing to do without my smartphone when I\'m on the bus or the subway.
I really hate to waste times, so that I always watch news during movement in order to save the times.
>>>> O really hate to waste time, so I always watch news during commute in order to save time.
Plus, I can\'t listen to musics which are the biggest delight to me in my life.
>>>> Plus, I won\'t be able to listen to songs that are the biggest delight to me in life.
Finally, if I can\'t use cell phone only in a day, I couldn\'t live a day systemically.
>>>> In conclusion, if I can\'t use cell phone only in a day, I wouldn\'t be able to live my day systematically.
Because writing my schedule on google calendar, I always receive alarms in calendar through smart phone.
>>>> Because when I write a memo on my schedule in Google calendar, I always receive notification alarms through smart phone.
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