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2018-10-08 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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> What do you enjoy about staying over at another people's house? When I was young, I sometimes stayed over at friend's house while playing video games and pillow fight. But, because it is very long ago story, I can't remember this vividly. So, I try to tell about my recent story on staying over at my house with friends. Since I have lived alone away from my parents, friends usually came in my house in order to hang out with together. Before they came in my house, they usually brought USB which store scary movies. Before watching those, we always said that "if we scare due to those, we are not men". But, as soon as those were played, we realize that we gather together, after coming to our sense. After movie was finished, as if not scaring due to this, we always said that "we did not scare for this". Then we couldn't sleep during night.

강사 첨삭

Hello Jin Young! Thank you for  the effort once again. Watching Scary movies are actually fun to do with other people. In my case, I enjoy watching them alone. I even laugh about some scenes sometimes. Although, there are still cases I have nightmares because of them.

- T. Beth

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When I was young, I sometimes stayed over at friend\'s house while playing video games and pillow fight.

>>>> CORRECT.    

But, because it is very long ago story, I can\'t remember this vividly.

>>>>  However, because it was a long time ago, I can\'t remember it vividly.  

So, I try to tell about my recent story on staying over at my house with friends.

>>>> So, I will try to tell about my recent story on having friends stay over at my house.     

Since I have lived alone away from my parents, friends usually came in my house in order to hang out with together.

>>>>  Since I have lived alone away from my parents, friends usually came to my house in order to hang out together.    

Before they came in my house, they usually brought USB which store scary movies.

>>>> CORRECT.

>>>> OR: They would bring with them a USB with scary movies stored in it.    

Before watching those, we always said that \"if we scare due to those, we are not men\".

>>>> Before watching those, we always said \"If we get scared due to those, we are not men\".    

But, as soon as those were played, we realize that we gather together after coming to our sense.

>>>> CORRECT.

>> OR: However, after the movie was played we realize we have gathered so close together after coming to our senses.    

After movie was finished, as if not scaring due to this, we always said that \"we did not scare for this\".

>>>> After finishing the movie, as if not scared due to this, we always said \"We were not scared.\"  

>>>> OR: After finishing the movie, acting up brave, we always said \"We were not scared.\"     

Then we couldn\'t sleep during night.

>>>>  Then we couldn\'t sleep during the night.  


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