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Thank you for this Jin Young. Yeah, there was a problem with the feedback. The one I wrote was not saved, so I had to rewrite them, which took me some time. Sorry about that. Well speaking of design, what design of smartphone do you want?
- T. Beth
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Samsung electronic will eradicate earphone jack on flagship smartphone.
>>>> Samsung electronic will eradicate earphone jack on smartphone flagship.
There would be possible that it will be applied in next model released after next fall.
>>>> There is a possibility that it will be applied on the next model released after next fall.
Detail reason why Samsung electronic eradicate earphone jack among some flagship model is not identified.
>>>> The detailed reason why Samsung electronic eradicate earphone jack among some flagship model is not identified.
Relate enterprise said it may be conducted because of something such as smartphone design\'s advantage and supply on wireless earphone.
>>>> Retail enterprise said it may be conducted because of reasons like smartphone design\'s advantage and supply on wireless earphone.
smartphone\'s designs have had trend that go toward thin.
>>>> Smartphone design trends has been becoming thin.
In other words, smartphone performances have to be developed, nonetheless, it must not be bigger or heavy, rather sustain thin appearance.
>>>> In other words, smartphone performances have to be developed. Nonetheless, it must not be bigger or heavy but rather sustain the thin appearance.
Using least components, it have to display best performance itself, so if earphone jack is disappeared, other components can be disposed in this place.
>>>> Although using least components, it has to display best performance by itself. So if the earphone jack disappears, other components can de disposed in this case.
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