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2018-10-16 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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I think the US should ban gun ownership. The number of gun crime deaths is increasing every year in America. The incidence of terrorism by a gun is increasing as well. The government shouldn't allow people to get a gun easily unless they are qualified for it. Otherwise, even terrorists can keep buying guns without difficulty like now. Ultimately, they have to regulate the firearms industry.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]. Thank you once again for this one. I agree with you. Imposing strict rules on gun ownership is definitely necessary. However, it won\'t be easy to do it in America because of other underlying factors. There are some active gun organizations that strongly support gun ownership. Tackling this issue abut gun crimes would need a lot of work.

- T. Beth

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I think the US should ban gun ownership.

>>>> CORRECT.

The number of gun crime deaths is increasing every year in America.

>>>> OR: The number of deaths due to gun crimes is increasing every year in America.

The incidence of terrorism by a gun is increasing as well.

>>>> CORRECT.

The government shouldn\'t allow people to get a gun easily unless they are qualified for it.

>>>> CORRECT.

Otherwise, even terrorists can keep buying guns without difficulty like now.

>>>> CORRECT.

Ultimately, they have to regulate the firearms industry.

>>>> CORRECT.

>>>> OR: They eventually have to regulate the firearm industry.

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