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Hello Jin Young. Thank you once again for this on. This is a good idea. I hope more stores would sell healthier food. Fresh vegetables that are ready to eat would be nice.
- T. Beth
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I usually visit Subway for buying sandwich having fresh vegetable because I don\'t cook and ingest a variety of foods.
>>>> I usually visit Subway to buy sandwich with fresh vegetable because I don\'t cook and ingest a variety of food.
So, I always think that if convenience store sell a variety of fresh vegetable, it will be good for me.
>>>> So, I always think that if convenience stores sell a variety of fresh vegetables, it would be good for me.
Of course, Korea\'s convenience stores sell lunch boxes including vegetable, but some kind of vegetable not many kind.
>>>> Of course, Korean convenience stores sell lunch boxes with vegetables, but there are only few kinds of vegetables.
These days, while social structure have been changed rapidly into single household, these demands that people want to buy healthy and various foods are increased explosively.
>>>> These days, because social structure has changed rapidly into single household, the demand for healthier and various kinds of food and increased.
if integrating these demands, convenience stores try to adopt a variety of healthy foods such as lunch box of fresh vegetable or low salt foods.
>>>> If these demands are to be considered, convenience stores would supply healthy foods such as lunch box with fresh vegetable or low salt foods.
Reflections regarding those demands can help convenience stores get more money than before.
>>>> Taking these demands into account will help convenience stores earn more profit than before.
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