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2018-10-24 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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> Do you always try to attend gatherings or events you are invited to? I'm inclined to attend gatherings only when invited by friends very intimate to me. When gatherings to enhance my ability invite me, I usually partake this, however, when event is held by someone who aren't intimate with me but only know me, I don't attend this event. When I attend something like that event, I feel like my precious time was evaporated because of this. However, in the case that event is held by someone who are very intimate with me, my opinion is changed abruptly. The time to spend with precious friends help me get more time because when I fall in depressed feeling, this experience spending funny time with friends heal my feeling. I have a tendency that I can't escape well from depressed feeling. Therefore, those memories help me escape this, so that it help me earn times.

강사 첨삭

Hello Jin Young. Thank you for this. Being in a good emotional state is really important for a long life. This is why we need to surround ourselves with fun people. I hope you have a lot of good people around you.

- T. Beth

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I\'m inclined to attend gatherings only when invited by friends very intimate to me.

>>>>  CORRECT.  

When gatherings to enhance my ability invite me, I usually partake this, however, when event is held by someone who aren\'t intimate with me but only know me, I don\'t attend this event.

>>>>  When gatherings to enhance my ability invite me, I usually partake in these.   However, when the event is held by someone I am not intimate with but knows me, I don\'t attend this event.

When I attend something like that event, I feel like my precious time was evaporated because of this.

>>>>  When I attend events like these,  I feel like my precious time is wasted. 

However, in the case that event is held by someone who are very intimate with me, my opinion is changed abruptly.

>>>>  However, in the case that the event is held by someone intimate to me, my opinion changes.  

The time to spend with precious friends help me get more time because when I fall in depressed feeling, this experience spending funny time with friends heal my feeling.

>>>>  The time spent with precious friends help me live longer because when I fall into a depressed feeling, this experience on spending a fun time with friends heal me emotionally.  

I have a tendency that I can\'t escape well from depressed feeling.

>>>>  I have a tendency to have difficulties escaping from depressed feelings.  

Therefore, those memories help me escape this, so that it help me earn times.

>>>>  Therefore, those fun memories help me escape this and help me to live longer.


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