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Hello Jin Young. Thank you for this. Being in a good emotional state is really important for a long life. This is why we need to surround ourselves with fun people. I hope you have a lot of good people around you.
- T. Beth
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I\'m inclined to attend gatherings only when invited by friends very intimate to me.
>>>> CORRECT.
When gatherings to enhance my ability invite me, I usually partake this, however, when event is held by someone who aren\'t intimate with me but only know me, I don\'t attend this event.
>>>> When gatherings to enhance my ability invite me, I usually partake in these. However, when the event is held by someone I am not intimate with but knows me, I don\'t attend this event.
When I attend something like that event, I feel like my precious time was evaporated because of this.
>>>> When I attend events like these, I feel like my precious time is wasted.
However, in the case that event is held by someone who are very intimate with me, my opinion is changed abruptly.
>>>> However, in the case that the event is held by someone intimate to me, my opinion changes.
The time to spend with precious friends help me get more time because when I fall in depressed feeling, this experience spending funny time with friends heal my feeling.
>>>> The time spent with precious friends help me live longer because when I fall into a depressed feeling, this experience on spending a fun time with friends heal me emotionally.
I have a tendency that I can\'t escape well from depressed feeling.
>>>> I have a tendency to have difficulties escaping from depressed feelings.
Therefore, those memories help me escape this, so that it help me earn times.
>>>> Therefore, those fun memories help me escape this and help me to live longer.
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