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2018-10-25 · 첨삭 강사 Shanee

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Dear. Teacher Shanee ! I'm good to see you again. You always kind. That makes me feel comfortable. I'm really expecting tomorrow class. See you soon ! It is often thought that the increase in juvenile crime can be attributed to violence in the media. Do you agree that this is the cause of juvenile crime? What solutions can you offer to deal with this situation? - I agree with that. It's getting bigger that media affect to people. It can make real not only juvenile crime but also every discrimination, violence and even sex crime. Therefore, I think the media should know about their responsibility and also people should get their ability can take prudently informations from the media.

강사 첨삭

Thanks a lot for writing this [이름]!

I really appreciate your effort.

I also want to thank you for always doing your best in class. I hope that you will never get tired.

See you tomorrow!

~Teacher Shanee^^,


Dear. Teacher Shanee !
I\'m good to see you again.

>>> I\'m happy to see you again.
 You always kind. 

>>> You are always kind.
 That makes me feel comfortable.
I\'m really expecting tomorrow class.

>>> OR: I am really looking forward to having tomorrow\'s class.
 See you soon !

It is often thought that the increase in juvenile crime can be attributed to violence in the media. Do you agree that this is the cause of juvenile crime?
What solutions can you offer to deal with this situation?

- I agree with that.

It\'s getting bigger that media affect to people.

>>> It\'s getting bigger that the media affects people.

It can make real not only juvenile crime but also every discrimination, violence and even sex crime.

>>> It doesn\'t only cause juvenile crimes but also discrimination, violence among people and sec crimes.

Therefore, I think the media should know about their responsibility and also people should get their ability can take prudently informations from the media.

>>> Therefore, I think the media should know their responsibility and people on the other hand should also be prudent when using any forms of media.

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