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2018-10-29 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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> What do you like the most about traveling? When I go on a trip, I'm inclined to experience local culture where I visit. So, rather going to tourist attraction, I usually visit local place like universities, small restaurants, and so on. Especially, in the local restaurants where I visit during tour, I can feel atmosphere on this country's people. For example, when I went to local restaurant in Boston in USA due to my friend who live in Boston taking me there, employees who work in there are very kind, but I feel these kindness as only formal action. So, I could think Americans are businessman who move by money thoroughly. But, I went to Da Nang in Vietnam, people who live in there always smile and look like happy. In addition, when I ask them how to get tourist attraction, they teach how I can get there in detail sincerely.

강사 첨삭

Hello Jin Young! Thank you once again for this one. I always appreciate your effort. Meeting local people is really great when traveling to new places. You can feel the authenticity of the culture through them. I hope you enjoy your next trip abroad, and experience more.

- T. Beth

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When I go on a trip, I\'m inclined to experience local culture where I visit.

>>>>> CORRECT. 

So, rather going to tourist attraction, I usually visit local place like universities, small restaurants, and so on.

>>>>> So rather than going to tourist attractions, I usually visit local places like universities, small restaurants, and so on.   

Especially, in the local restaurants where I visit during tour, I can feel atmosphere on this country\'s people.

>>>>> Especially when visiting local restaurants while traveling, I can get mingle with local people in the country.  

For example, when I went to local restaurant in Boston in USA due to my friend who live in Boston taking me there, employees who work in there are very kind, but I feel these kindness as only formal action.

>>>>> For example, when a friend of mine took me to a restaurant in Boston in the US,  the employees who work there were very kind. However, I felt like their kindness was for the sake of formal customer service.

So, I could think Americans are businessman who move by money thoroughly.

>>>>> So, I have thought Americans are businessmen who only work for money.   

But, I went to Da Nang in Vietnam, people who live in there always smile and look like happy.

>>>>> But when I went to Da Nang in Vietnam, people who lived there always smiling and looked happy.

In addition, when I ask them how to get tourist attraction, they teach how I can get there in detail sincerely.

>>>>>  In addition, when I asked them how to get to a tourist attraction, they sincerely gave me directions in detail.   

 

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