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2018-10-29 · 첨삭 강사 Irene

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Hi Irene I am busy with doing my homework.kkk ESSAY: Some people feel unsafe when they are in public than at home. What are the possible causes for this and what are some possible solutions? It is a natural thing people feel safe at home than they are in public. That is why we call home 'home sweet home' However, People who feel unsafe in public hardly must have a trauma. With a trauma, they don't want to go outside and stay all day in a house. In this case, we have to find the cause through a counsel treatment. On the other hand, the people who doesn't have a trauma imagine that outside is dangerous and something will happen to them. They have to have a courage to break the wall and go out side. If they do, they will realize that somehing have to happen must happen in public as well as at home.

강사 첨삭

Thank you for doing your homework [이름].  He he he. ^_^
~. T. Irene~
Hi Irene
 I am busy with doing my homework.kkk
>>>  I am busy doing my homework.
 ESSAY: Some people feel unsafe when they are in public than at home. What are the possible causes for this and what are some possible solutions?
 It is a natural thing people feel safe at home than they are in public.
>>>  It is a natural thing for people to feel safe at home than they are in public.
 That is why we call home \'home sweet home\'
>>>  That is why we call it \'home sweet home\'.
 However, People who feel unsafe in public hardly must have a trauma.
>>>  However, people who strongly feel unsafe (endangered) in public must have had a traumatic experience.
With a trauma, they don\'t want to go outside and stay all day in a house.
>>> Because of the trauma, they don\'t want to go outside and would just prefer to stay indoors all day long.
In this case, we have to find the cause through a counsel treatment.
>>> In such cases, we have to find the cause of the trauma through counseling.
 On the other hand, the people who doesn\'t have a trauma imagine that outside is dangerous and something will happen to them.
>>>  There are others also who never experienced any traumatic events but they still believe that the world outside their own door is a dangerous place. They fear that something bad might happen to them outside.
 They have to have a courage to break the wall and go out side.
>>> They need to have the courage to break the walls of fear and go outside.
 If they do, they will realize that somehing have to happen must happen in public as well as at home. 
>>> If they do, they might realize that whatever may happen to them outside can happen at home.


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