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Hi Irene!
Today is the last day of this month.
31.Oct is my favorite day of a year. To me, today means end of autum as well as starting of winter. I love late autum and early of winter season. I will feel melancholy mood watching fallen leaves in my break time.
ESSAY: A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
I hate cruelty to animal such as animal shows, animal tests, violence to animal.
Animal can not be equal to human. but It doesn't mean that Animal can be exploited by people.
We still eat porks, chickens and beefs.Does it mean we expoit animal? For example, some koreans eat dogs as foods.for this reason, S.P.C.A criticize Korean hardly. To Me, eating dogs is a kind of curtural and ethical difference.
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강사 첨삭
Hello [이름]! It\'s a nice day! ^_^ The clouds are clearing now and the sun almost came out. Thank God for this weather.
~T.Irene~
Hi Irene!
Today is the last day of this month.
>>> Correct.
31.Oct is my favorite day of a year.
>>> The 31st of October is my favorite day of the year.
To me, today means end of autum as well as starting of winter.
>>> To me, today means end of autumn as well as the start of winter.
I love late autum and early of winter season.
>>> I love late autumn and early winter season.
I will feel melancholy mood watching fallen leaves in my break time.
>>> I feel a melancholy mood watching fallen leaves on my break time.
ESSAY: A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
I hate cruelty to animal such as animal shows, animal tests, violence to animal.
>>> I hate any form of cruelty to animals such as animal shows, animal tests, and violence to animal.
Animal can not be equal to human. but It doesn\'t mean that Animal can be exploited by people.
>>> Animals are not equal to humans but it doesn\'t mean that animal can be exploited by people.
We still eat porks, chickens and beefs.
>>> Though, we still eat pork, chicken and beef.
Does it mean we expoit animal?
>>> Does it mean we exploit animals?
For example, some koreans eat dogs as foods.for this reason, S.P.C.A criticize Korean hardly.
>>> For example, some Koreans eat dog meat. For this reason, S.P.C.A strongly criticizes Koreans.
To Me, eating dogs is a kind of curtural and ethical difference.
>>> For me, eating dog meat is a kind of cultural and ethnical difference.
~T.Irene~
Hi Irene!
Today is the last day of this month.
>>> Correct.
31.Oct is my favorite day of a year.
>>> The 31st of October is my favorite day of the year.
To me, today means end of autum as well as starting of winter.
>>> To me, today means end of autumn as well as the start of winter.
I love late autum and early of winter season.
>>> I love late autumn and early winter season.
I will feel melancholy mood watching fallen leaves in my break time.
>>> I feel a melancholy mood watching fallen leaves on my break time.
ESSAY: A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
I hate cruelty to animal such as animal shows, animal tests, violence to animal.
>>> I hate any form of cruelty to animals such as animal shows, animal tests, and violence to animal.
Animal can not be equal to human. but It doesn\'t mean that Animal can be exploited by people.
>>> Animals are not equal to humans but it doesn\'t mean that animal can be exploited by people.
We still eat porks, chickens and beefs.
>>> Though, we still eat pork, chicken and beef.
Does it mean we expoit animal?
>>> Does it mean we exploit animals?
For example, some koreans eat dogs as foods.for this reason, S.P.C.A criticize Korean hardly.
>>> For example, some Koreans eat dog meat. For this reason, S.P.C.A strongly criticizes Koreans.
To Me, eating dogs is a kind of curtural and ethical difference.
>>> For me, eating dog meat is a kind of cultural and ethnical difference.
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