homework

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I think if we can swim, it\'s difficult to survive when we are fall into water.

I think that if we can swim, it\'s still difficult to survive when we fall into the water.
 because swimming as a hobby is different from survival swimming.

 It is because swimming as a hobby is different from swimming for survival.
 but swimming helps us to stay healthy and fit.

The best thing about swimming is that it helps us to stay healthy and fit.
 and it\'s a good exercise for people who have a weak joint.

It is also a good form of exercise for people who have weak joints.

so ,at swimming fool, there are lots of elderly people who walk in the water.

This is why, usually there are lot of elderly people try to move their legs in water in a pool.
 I always recommend friends to learn the swimming.

I always recommend to my friends to learn how to swim.

It\'s really fun to get a new skill and to see the change of my body.

It\'s really fun to develop a new skill and to see my body change positively.