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Hello Jin Young. Thanks again for this one. I agree, a good closing statement could really affect the way you feel about someone.
- T. Beth
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I want to hear my friends that today is the best day because of me when paring with them.
>>>> I want to hear my friends say that today is the best day because they have spent time with me.
Because I want those to spend a fun time with me, when they say closing sentences like that, it give me a happy emotion.
>>>> Because I want them to spend a fun time with me. When they say a closing statement like that, it gives me a happy emotion.
>>>> OR: Because I want them to spend a fun time with me. When they say a closing statement like that, it makes me feel happy.
These days, while getting older, it is hard to meet each other frequently, so these warm closing sentences have been important to me.
>>>> These days, as we get older, it is hard to meet each other frequently. So these warm closing statements have been important to me.
Especially, because friends live abroad now in my case, the time that sometimes meet them is more precious for me.
>>>> Especially that my friends live abroad, the times that we meet are more precious to me.
Although relationship isn\'t intimate between other people, I think closing sentence can decide person\'s impression.
>>>> For people who I am not that intimate with, I think their closing sentence can decide my impression on them.
In the case where somebody meet their buyer, giving good impression to buyer through good closing sentence impact on their sales colossally.
>>>> In the case where somebody meet a buyer, giving a good impression to the buyer through a good closing statement has an impact on their sales colossally.
The more to give a good impression, the more chance you can get.
>>>> The more you give a good impression, the more chances you get.
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